JumpyDot

4/10 For some people this might do the trick, but for me it felt like you could have cut a large portion of it out and gotten the same information ...

This one is very intriguing, it seems to have this odd feel of a grandpa telling you a story. I love this title. Even if our nation's are at war. ...

EDIT 6/10 Though it's a fine opening, it is so stereotypical. Try putting some more importance behind the words and make it seem like a character feels some sort of ...

4/10 For something that should have intrigued, this was bland. --- Miles Walker would be the last person to ever die.

7/10 It has promise, but it doesn't hold up. (And no, I didn't. I just wanted to break the fourth-wall and that seemed like a good place to do it.) ...

3/10 Not gonna expound upon this, as I don't know what's wrong with it, I just find it extremely boring. --- Jumpyspot had nothing to write on the bottom sentence, ...

2/10 You basically said what was wrong with your own sentence when you were talking about mine. xD --- Explosions filled the air with chaotic sounds that was a mix ...

2/10 Another mystery novel opener that we have seen too often. --- She seems to be taking me seriously I thought. We should kill her.

3/10 Intensely boring. A first sentence should tell us about a character, just a smidgen. It should leave hints at the story, and lastly, it should be great. That was ...

6/10 I seem to be handing out a lot of these. Again, it seems like you're trying to hard to have people rate it 10/10 or stuff. --- If there's ...

6/10 Though, again, it does intrigue, it feels ripped out of any beginning of a paranormal fantasy or a mystery novel. --- Hello, and welcome to I try, in short ...

6/10 though it does intrigue, it seems like your trying to get me to say that it's cool. --- The Jeep was old and battered and it didn't bode well ...

ignore me i'm a stupid

Well, I've always been a storyteller. My magnum opus was told when I was two and a half years old about my porcupine saving me from the dinosaur coming through ...

Nice avvie. Joker be awesome. 8/10