Julri

You can find Chapter One right here: This chapter is just a random conversation of some of my girl characters. Two boy-crazy, one giggly, and one very bored. Real fun, ...

Nice one. I like the last stanza a lot. Peace! :D

This was really good. I liked the whole thing, especially how it developed. Very nice! Peace! 8)

Wow. That was... wow. Well written, descriptive, thought provoking. Just... wow. Okay, that made no sense. But, the point I'm trying to get across was that it was really, really, ...

Bean! 8)

You know, I have this problem all the time. Last week Daffy stole my socks. Peace! :shock:

Wow. This totally sounds like something I would have written. In fact, I'm considering stealing your idea and selling it for millions. Whoa... Anyways, I can't put the awesomeness of ...

Normally I don't really like haikus, but your's were great! Especially the first one, because of the words you picked and, well, just everything. If you have more, you should ...

Boni_Bee: Thanks for the suggestions! Yeah, it's just a rough draft. When I go through I'll be sure to look for those things. I wondered about the description a lot, ...

In no particular order... 1. Slaughterhouse Five (or Cat's Cradle...) 2. The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy 3. A Great and Terrible Beauty 4. Lord of the Rings 5. The ...

You shouldn't worry too much about how similar it is to other books. Besides, the magic school idea has been done by a lot of authors, but as long as ...

The idea's been done before, but if it's well written it could work. Just make sure to give your characters a lot of personality and to make sure the plot ...

I love the expressions on their faces, especially the last one. Somethin about the second one's face was a little odd, but she looked fine otherwise. Anyways, your drawings are ...

It was pretty good, but there were a couple of problems. It could use some dialouge to make it run a little bit better and you don't get much of ...

Howdy! Please tell me what you think! Oh, and if you can give me some suggestions to make it better that would be totally awesome. Peace! Chapter One "Rise and ...