JosephGeorge

Thanks for the review passenger! It was actually very helpful. I haven't gone back to make an edit of this piece yet, mostly because I'm focusing on getting a little ...

Thanks for the review amelia! It was definitely helpful. I agree about this line against his parched, cracked and bleeding lips as it's probably one too many adjectives to chuck ...

Thanks for your comments JuneIparis! It's good to see that someone enjoyed this little bit. I definitely agree about the longer paragraphs, in the sense that it's the normal way ...