JosephDean

What do you mean when the woman tries to make false memories and the MC says that the woman was completely faithful? (stupid question...I know) Anyways, I always do love ...

Lilymoore, :) If I ever do, I'll definitely let you know. x] Saphirra, :D thanks so much!!

Much thanks to both of you! I don't know if I'll ever expand this (probably not as it was just a school assignment, haha), but I'll definitely consider those suggestions, ...

Haha, sorry; people turned the wireless box off at like 11:15 lol. Anyways, thanks, Pandy =]

Lol, it was only supposed to be quick and fly through it; that was the point :wink: I forgot to mention it had to be under 500 words. *goes back ...

Here I am again with a the review you asked :) Never had I ever felt being with someone could ever feel so wonderful…and draining. I had to read this ...

Since Jospeh (spelling?) has already nit-picked for you, I'll do Characters/Plot. "Joseph"? It's not that hard to spell :P ------ I was really bored for a few minutes, so I ...

Thanks, Ash :) “normalise” should be spelt as such: “normalize” British versus American English lol. I try to spell everything the "original" way when I can help it :wink:

Um... Eraqio.... You have to post new parts in new threads.... it's because they want you to have to spend your points to post... so um... Delete the post, make ...

Thank you so much yet again, Ashley :) I guess we all see what happens when I force myself to write at seven o'clock in the morning. :oops: Next time, ...

Well, if you want to go with the textbook definition, yeah they're "kids," but I consider kids to be like eleven and younger, lol. Right now, Grayson is 16, Jacob ...

I'm not sure if this grammar rule is valid in this case but your verbs aren't parallel. "Pulling" and "Inseparable" aren't the same type of verb. I don't know if ...

Thanks so much again, Ashley :D Jacob seems like he has gone through a whole growing-up-fast-stage. I feel like this sounds like an adult speaking, not a child. Maybe go ...

Splendidly written, adi :D I feel kind of bad that I still don't get what the " s t i l l " and " f o r w a ...

I think you mean bag of chips. I know you probably had this sentence twice for "dramatic effect" but it kind of distracted me from the what you want. Yeah ...