JosephDean

I enjoyed it. The lack of capitalization, I will not critique. Keeping it lower-cased throughout made it unfold through the eyes of a child - at least that's the impression ...

Well, one person who cared enough to look at it, I graciously thank you! :D I'm not a big fan of the A-A-B-B scheme myself, but this was written a ...

Very interesting. I think the way that you organised the words just gave it some extra... what would be the proper word? Oomph? Lol. It just helped it convey its ...

Other than the punctuation mistakes that have already been covered by other patrons, I cannot find any real "mistakes" that make me halt and ask myself what you are trying ...

Well, I must say that the beginning really drew me into the story. I'm all for gory descriptions - they intrigue me - but the ending was kind of a ...

Fantastic! I'm glad to see that some people still use the non-rhyming aspect of poetry :) I agree with a previous comment up above, those last two lines really did ...

This is very interesting! The only issues I saw were the uncapitalised i's and the word "loose" (as in, "not tight") instead of "lose" (as in "to no longer have ...

Hello, YWS. My name... or more accurately... The name I use for all of my publications, as well as for this site, is Joseph Dean. I'm not a novice to ...

Trapped in a box that I put myself in Fighting for a life that I truly want to end Walking barefoot on glass and continuing to stumble Friendships thought to ...

No, I did not feel too lazy to name it... the name actually is An Unnamed Poem . I am only uploading this to make sure that my account works ...