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Re: In His Box
First, thanks for your critiques. I do appreciate it :) Second, they're faux rhymes. They don't have to technically be exactly the same. Third, I switched to third in the ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: Worst Book You've Ever Read
*Has a bad seventh grade flashback* Hatchet .... *shudder* The entire time I was just yelling at the pages, "Die already!" Also, I think it's called Tru Confessions ... about ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: The Host
Wow, I just finished it a little over an hour ago. I'm confident in saying that it was much better than Twilight. The characters were MUCH more believable, and Meyer's ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: "Geraniums in Cairo" and other stories
Wow, I'm surprised that no one has reviewed this. I know it was written a while back, but anyways... “Do geraniums grow in Cairo?” “Oh please, they grow wherever.” “They ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: Writing in a Different Mood
Lol, I just might do that. Thanks :) Maybe I should just force myself to write meaningless sentences and then go back and edit it all once I have words ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: On and On
Wow, that was really great! I'm surprised you think that you are lousy at poetry because that one flowed well enough for me :). The first sentence that took up ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: Writing in a Different Mood
Haha, I'm always listening to music while I write, draw, etc. Odd thing is, I can write an extremely gory death scene while listening to Paramore :P So... that wouldn't ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: Writing in a Different Mood
Thanks, you did help a bit, lol. The thing is, I have four main characters (but one is just.. .um... main-er? than the others). From my Main-Main Character, it is ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: I Will Follow You Into The Dark
Most of the things that I found have already been mentioned. However... ...his smooth russet skin... There should be a comma between smooth and russet. When you have multiple adjectives ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: Forest People Pt. 1
Very interesting, indeed! A couple things that jumped out at me though. First, the obvious ones. I moved my bare soles silently across the floor of brown and green, then ...
Sep 24, 2008 -
Re: Algebra 1 help!! Please Help! Due Tomorrow!!
Is it a sad thing that I'm in AP Calculus and I don't know how to do half this stuff? To be fair, I know the properties, but as Sam ...
Sep 24, 2008 -
Re: My teacher and I disagree about this MLA format thing
The commas in red should be there. *nods* The "when....." part is a dependent clause and omitting the comma will create a run-on sentence. :) Tell your teacher to put ...
Sep 24, 2008 -
Re: Falling for Jake
Haha, I loved that ending. Somewhat predictable, but very much entertaining. Allow me to state that I literally laughed out loud at the blunt use of the .. erm...... italicized ...
Sep 24, 2008 -
Re: Writing in a Different Mood
Well, in my seemingly neverending novel, I'm stuck at a chapter because it has to be written in a happy, somewhat joyful (but not too much) mood, but I don't ...
Sep 24, 2008 -
Re: An Unnamed Poem
Thank you so much!
Sep 24, 2008
