JosephDean

Poetry is supposed to be capitalised at the start of every line anyway. That's basic Poetry 101. :)

*wipes eyes dry* What? Pfft, you people cried? Pansies...... *sees everyone glaring at me*... What?... Oh fine :D OMG This was outstanding!!! All the mistakes I found have all ready ...

Phew, that's a lot!! Lol. Be sure you re-read your submissions a few times before you submit them because I see a lot of run-on sentences. Also, watch for your ...

Fourth line, you need an apostrophe in "Whats." Fifth line, you need to change "your" to "you're." It's really good, but really short, lol. Expand on it a bit if ...

I felt like Juliet, You were Romeo. Change the comma to a period - those are both complete sentences. You helped me through my recovery, you became my best friend, ...

ever since that day... I see you changed the sentence before that, so you need to capitalise "ever." I leaned against the trunk of the tree I was sitting in. ...

Very nice!! I had started to list things for my critique, but Searria H. beat me to them all!! Lol. All was still, no wind rustled through the trees, no ...

Let me critique first :) I took a deep breath and let it out, watching the air puff up, up, and away. As soon as I stepped inside, I power-walked ...

So you're trying to go 9-8-7...and so-on with the syllables, right? Awesome! Period at the end of the first line. Period at the end of the second line. And periods ...

His eyes were soft and them my body began to feel the same. It should have a comma after "soft" and correct "them" to "then." Even still, "then my body ...

Haha, yay I feel loved XD BFMV Fans Unite, indeed :D

Yeah, I felt somewhat the same... [spoiler]I knew that they'd do what they did...... but part of me wanted Wanda to just stay in Melanie's body. I could definitely sense ...

Very nice! You should be sure to capitalise the first word in every line. that I reeked of desperation, If you're going to keep punctuation in your poem, that comma ...

The rhythm is excellent and the rhymes are wonderful. Try to expand it a bit and let us know more about what's going on. For what is there, it's great ...

Welcome!! I know I'm not a Greeter or anything, but I'd like to be the first to welcome you to the site! I've only been a member for a few ...