Jordrake

I barely ever write reviews. No offense to any of the writers here, but it's hard to grasp my attention in the first paragraph. Normally I lose interest. This had ...

Well, to explain Denise's repitition, I thought it made it clear that she's used to having people become averse to her due to her bold personality, and is finding it ...

Yeah, I was worried when I originally wrote it that it was a bit fast, but with any luck it didn't break the suspension of disbelief. I just didn't know ...

Thanks for the CC, youreit. I based the nerdier parts of Ben on myself, so if he's a cliched nerd, it's only because I am. I feel that your main ...

Thanks a bunch, Dreamy. I appreciate it.

The thrilling conclusion! "Ah, here arrives Lysander, with his fair Hermia at his side!" The same man who had recruited them greeted them as they walked through the doors of ...

Not bad at all. The opening works well, leading a natural flow into the slower events of the rest of the peice. As fight scenes go, it's fluid and easy ...

Part the second of my first foray into the world of romantic fiction, Give Me Your Hands "Hey, Ben." Denise sat down next to him. It was the third time ...

While there isn't much to them yet, the characters are quite interesting. The emotions they feel seem real, even if they could be presented in a more subtle manner. Rather ...

Thanks ever so much for the warm welcome, you guys. I would have reviewed some other works first, but I couldn't find any works that interested me right off the ...

Thanks. I'll keep splitting in mind for future submissions.

Okay, this is my first submission to this site, so I don't know if I should have split it into chapters or if I've rated it lower than I should ...