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Hello Audrey. I'm Jordan and I'm going to review your Chapter. Well... Overall, I loved it. I only found one typo which is terrific, according to me. The only thing ...

Marissa Coolridge sat in her car, tightening her cleats, it was the last soccer game of the year. "I hope you make a goal today, honey!" Her mother said, smiling. ...

"Get Out!" Even though Krislyn expected the words, they stung her like a swarm of bees. Krislyn was a seventeen year old party girl. She should have been kicked out ...

Hello There! I'm Jordan and I'll be your critique. First of all... I loved how you started... with the creepy stalker guy always staring at Rose and put the creepy ...

Hey. I'm Jordan and I'll be your critique. (Well at least for now. :]) It was interesting how you compared yourself to the tree. It was... odd. But I really ...

Hey Sam! Welcome to YWS. I can't wait to critique and read one of your novels. Just PM me when you post one if you post one. Be Active always! ...

Hey Jamie! I'm Jordan and I'll be your critique. I thought it was a very good beginning of a terrific story. The only thing I thought you needed to add ...

Hey!! I'm Jordan and I'm your critique. I loved this... I'm a big fan of dreaming! Couldn't find mistakes. But I prefer I full word. (picky writer) rather than 'cause. ...

Hey Hannah! (BlueShift) Welcome to YWS! It's great that your a writer and that you want to do it as a career! :] Have Fun & ask lots of questions! ...

Hello Spongebob!! So... Spongebob is a talented writer now? I'm looking forward to read one of your stories. Welcome to YWS! P.S. - I love your show!! -- Jordan

Hello. :] That's alright if you don't know how to give reviews very well... I've been a member on this sight for about a year and I'm still not that ...

Hello I'm Jordan and I'll be your critique. I thought you described everything very well and the only thing that I would recommend is that you put a Chapter 1 ...

Tonight was the night of the Sophmore's Annual Snowball winter dance. Jenna Applebaum was going with her boyfriend of four years, Jake Derters. "Bye mom! Don't wait up for me, ...

I liked how you told us to picture them. I can just see Bella's hands in Edward's and his deep hypnotizing eyes. I can't turn down any Twilight story. I ...

Hi, I'm Jordan and I will be your critique this evening. (Its evening here, at least.) The Story- The story was brilliant, I loved the theme of it. You showed ...