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I have a point in my story at which the main character throws up in shock and disgust. I kind of have to include it, but I can't seem to ...

Bizzare! In fact I was running all over the place with Whit, like a chicken with its head cut off, and then, somehow, he managed to kiss me. It was ...

I hate skinny girl pics. Make me jealous.

My father Lijano. I hate him for leaving my mother the way he did. She couldn't support us. I hope I never see him again~ Nimo What are your siblings ...

When Eli became cold after the death of our friend. He was spiteful for no reason, and refused to tell me anything about what was going on with Aller and ...

I'll do one! When have you been your angriest. Aw man! Now I wish I could reply to that one...

When Ed was being goofy once. He had wax lips stuck to his, and he grabbed me around the waist and kissed me with them on. It was a joke ...

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When I was being questioned about what I remembered in the ECRF hospital. I couldn't remember anything when they got to my family, and I broke down in front of ...

I have two characters in my story: a 15 year old girl and a 17 year old guy. I'm writing from the girl's point of view. Do you guys have ...

Very informative. That's what happens when Stinkoman teaches grammar. (...) "DOT DOT DOT!" 20X6! HAHA! Good one Griffin, but I must ask: Are you asking for some kind of challeeeenge?!

Very good! Kept me interesting. Definitely continue this. I especially like that you remind me of my own writing! Wait. I take that back. I shan't insult you.

You haven't really given us anything to read yet! Its only a couple paragraphs. In order to decide on whether or not we like the story, we need to know ...

Okay, there sould be commas before the "buts" and more periods. Otherwise you have a junked up run-on sentence. Ex: I tried to slice through the evil thing, but it ...

Um... my story involves firearms, and until recently I didn't realize something: I know nothing about firearms! A thirteen year old girl is usually not an authority on that subject ...