JimmyTheMighty

Mostly very good but your rythms were off in many places, which is a big no-no in limericks. You have to be careful when picking the rhyme for the beginning ...

very beautiful. I love the way you tell the story like that of a legend - as if you were far away but genuinly cared about the characters. However the ...

Very poignant, and quite beautiful. Not being a big fan of fantasy or science fiction it was great to see a work like this. Your use of adjectives was superb, ...

Wow! This was an amazing read! The writing was incredibly smooth, if you know what I mean. There was no disruption anywhere and the story carried on very well which ...

This is exquisitly written, very interesting. I don't really have much to add, except to say, carry on with your writing! :)

This is absolutely beautiful! The detail is exquisite, the leaves are light and almost feathery looking, and I want to reach out and touch them ;-D It looks much more ...

Thanks for all of the reviews, this is my first piece on yws so its great getting all the feedback.

Be nice :) My life ended three months ago. I feel like I have an expiry date – like my life is already over, like I’m just biding time. In ...

This an absolutely exquisite piece, beautiful and stirring. Thats all I really have to say. Keep up with the fantastic work, I also loved the poem about the hospital jail ...

You had a change in tense early on in the story that interrupted the flow, and needs to be changed, the rest of the story was good however. I loved ...

The first line in your poem is certainly the best I loved the imagery and it seemed perfect for a song of some sort. If you could change the rest ...

This is a truly beautiful piece of writing, the repetition of 111 times is what made it for me. In a way it is sad and happy which is very ...

One word - wow! This is some truly amazing artwork here! And if these are just "scribbles" I can't wait to see some more of your work...

This is hilarious! It had the potential to be really cheesy (excuse the bad pun) but its actually really funny and well written, its easy to imagine the characters going ...

One of the highlights of this for me is the first line, the first line is very important and I think yours is perfect. It adds drama and makes me ...