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Ah, a slightly cleaner and more intriguing continuation. I didn't find anything to critique here; I do wonder now though, whether that first piece is at all necessery. This would ...

A sudden terror seized him from the inside, and he realized he had never fully realized what was going to happen until now Repitition of realized, annoys. Try: A sudden ...

Hey! Thanks for the crit, much appreciated. I am definetly looking to finish and publish this, though when that happens, I think it will be a lot different to what ...

Yeah, I'm in agreement with you on all those points. I really enjoyed the beginning too, it was a unique situation for a unique character but I couldn't just leave ...

For brilliant fantasy - and I am currently reading the greatest epic fantasy series ever written (far eclipsing Lord of the Rings, Wheel of Time, or other notables such as ...

Yeah, its not finished. Don't know why I started writing this, lol, it just came out of nowhere. But I submitted to my class at uni for work-shopping, so I ...

Great idea, not so great execution. That about sums it up. If I wasn't so tired, I would point out the dozen or so typo's that are littered throughout. You ...

I. His worn and frayed jacket was the first thing I noticed. The lacklustre purple fabric bloomed beneath the rain into a fuller, darker shade more imperial than the last. ...

Name: 50% - stalking fire? What if it got a restraining order? Avatar: 65% - yay anime Country: 100% - its a country, dontcha know Custom Title: 50% Overall: I ...

I've known of them for a while now, but have yet to read them. I saw an episode of the TV show - based on the books of course - ...

Girls have a tremendous capacity for falsehood. As do guys, it - to me anyway - just seems worse when a girl does it; something about the way they can ...

Okay, so a little context here: I've been reading fantasy from the very beginning. It was the first genre I began reading at around age nine or ten, in primary ...

Thanks for the comments, all. I wanted to extend and change this a little bit, but I've run out of time in terms of the contest so I'll just have ...

I am so confused right now.

Who pays these clowns to do these tests? I swear, every day I hear of some new but ultimately pointless discovery by scientists...I mean, aren't there diseases that we need ...