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Two Celts – [s]a[/s] Patrick Carr and [s]a [/s]Benjamin Burdick – were prepared to march out to King Street and meet their foe You over-write most of this piece, dear ...

Welcome! Any chance of giving us a bit more to go on? What you read, write, do, etc? Hope you enjoy yourself here, Feel free to PM for anything. Cheerio

Well, er... It could just be a shallow story. Maybe you were looking too much into it, eh? XD I'm going to assume the story is translated from Japanese; twould ...

Welcome! Dude, the Aussie contingent on YWS is growing ever stronger, soon we will dominate the world!! ...I mean... ah... spread love and peace....with, the, you know... penguins and stuff. ...

"Emily, hurry up with those boxes!" my mother yelled at me, unloading some boxes herself. "Yes, ma'am," I said obediently. It is better to simply agree and do what she ...

Hey, popping by to say thanks! I wish I'd gotten that review beforehand though, as it is, I've already handed it in. Ah, well, cheers anyway. If you're up to ...

It is colder than [s]when we were younger[/s] That's the only thing I would suggest changing. 'before' will do or 'It is colder now.' Something less awkwardly phrased. I didn't ...

Quinn’s attention was one of those disreputable, flighty things that you want [s]to[/s] very badly until you finally get it. get rid of - 'to' - or add 'have' Bars ...

He sailed through the air before landing hitting the side of the walkway with his back and falling into the dirty water. landing/hitting - pick one. This time there was ...

Way to join the dark side. XD

...Weren't you a mod before? I always remember you as being green. But congratumalationism anyway.

You're right. This does need help. The afternoon sun seeped through my blinds and flooded my room, casting its brightest rays upon the chestnut hair of my best friend who ...

Is that it? That's either the end of the first act, or the end of the whole piece. Naaw. So very sad. Poor Sage. Keep in mind those points I ...

Quite aside from their being long - which in itself, can be looked over - something extraordinary happens when you write them. The character stops. And you begin to talk. ...

Ah, and we reach the first scene that has true feeling! Yay! This was a good one and I haven't many complaints, beyond what I've been saying all this time. ...