Jiggity

Every moment I walk makes me desire and end an end. And really, this is just another way of repeating the first sentence; there is no need for repetition. Also, ...

Ack, I'm so tired, but I shall endeavour to leave a comment. Basically, I disagree with the first few who reviewed this - in that a) it wasn't confusing and ...

I wanted to be mean, because you disagreed with me on Cooper's piece :twisted: But you're too good for that. :wink: Do you want juice?” he asks. “No.” “Do you ...

It was a special night gone wrong,[s] so wrong[/s]. I don't like this as an opening sentence, and the repetition makes it awkward. My memory was etched with [s]the image ...

Twilight? Er... Well, here at YWS we welcome all! Despite our many and varied differences, we are joined by our love of writing. Still... Twilight? XD. Have fun, post a ...

which are skewered by my thin pink stiring straw. you either mean string or stirring The slow grad and puff of the cigarette, today is Lucky Strike, tomorrow Reynold's, burns ...

*shuffles forward* please, sir, I would like some more.

[s]It did not take Creep one day to heal his wounds[/s]. For three months he stayed in Concetta’s room as he recovered, trying not to move too much lest he ...

What the humans have to understand is that vampyres can live a pretty long time You're kidding! No, really? I am shocked. I would not have - indeed, no one ...

Yeah, what she said. Snoinkledoinkle is right, you should put more thought into something before you post it. This is completely random and rather useless. Of course, it hints vaguely ...

The best part of writing is entertaining other people. It's the result, not the process, that interests me.

Everything was dead silent Is there any other kind of silence? A living one, perhaps? Redundant phrasing. t was dark outside, a sign of the storm ah, no, its a ...

First off, welcome to YWS. It had no number plates and tinted windows, [s]which hid the driver from view completely.[/s] Well, obviously. That's what tinted windows do. Four men, dressed ...

I see though her chicken wire skin, though. I think you meant 'through' initially his house is all slick and shiny and delicate and [s]it[/s] I feel kind like if ...

"Bob" - Dijon Valliere She calmed beneath him, the agitated tension within seemingly bleeding out of her. It was the same with his rage; with the death of the storm ...