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“Don’t Forget the Ladies” She’s the silent villain falling into a slumber beside him in bed. Wife. Wife. My wife is dead. Where has she gone? Dense, cold bones are ...

In line 5, you don't need a comma after "panes". If you wish to keep the comma, then you must omit the "that" in line 6 to make the sentence ...

This piece is very interesting, to say the least. I'm frustrated with the lack of structure in the poem. If the fluidity of the lines was meant to reinforce another ...