Jetpack

Hey, Jet here to give you a quick review. I'm avoiding nitpicking for the moment, because you can write clearly and cohesively and there are no glaring punctuation errors. You ...

You have a very intriguing start here, but I think you need to work on the emotional value of the piece, predominantly. There are also a few punctuation errors, which ...

As this is for a contest, I'll nitpick, so don't think I'm being harsh! My whole body was bone-numbingly cold. Is "bone-numbingly" a word? I suppose it is, but it's ...

I think Rosie picked out some of the nitpicks I was going to mention in her review above, so I'll just give you some general feedback. Don't take it the ...

I think Sureal pretty much covers it all in the above review. It sounds like you have an interesting fantasy world here, but you need to let us in slowly; ...

I was going to cover this line-by-line, but I've decided to give you a few general pointers on areas you need to improve on instead. If you want your writing ...

Hi. I think I've seen you around, but we haven't spoken. I suppose this is a bit late seeing when you posted it, but a review's a review, right? Nitpicks ...

I like your premise with this little piece, but I think you've correctly identified your main problem in your introduction: some of your sentences are very clumsily worded and generally, ...

Vampires! Finally, I found one. I love reviewing these. I'll get going, I guess. She was just standing there, swaying in time with the music as she danced with her ...

Hey, Jet here. I'll give you a quick review, because I agree almost entirely with Rosalie on a lot of points. The story is a tad too cutesy when compared ...

I genuinely can't find much to nitpick at here. You're right, this was refreshing, and it makes a change. The characters are so wonderfully drawn and you've got the little ...

Hey Pandora. I'm Jet. I think, as your piece is quite short, I'll give you a focussed general review rather than just nitpicking. First off, the positives. You have an ...

Hi, I'm Jet. This is my first review in a few months, so bear with me; I'll do my best. It went on, time did, and Eros became a man. ...

Here I am, Aqua. Sorry it took some time for me to get here! I'll make the review extra comprehensive to make up for it, but I'm not sure there's ...

Here I am, for review number 4! Okay, since this is the first real review you've had here, I guess I'll go over all the main points. :arrow: You're rushing ...