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Well, I've requested a couple of reviews in the Will Review For Food threads, so hopefully they'll come through soon. My intent was just to use the soldier as a ...

This is a contest entry. It's in Other Fiction, called 'Green with Envy' for the moment, and is kind of hard to explain without killing it completely. Though it's not ...

This is so sweet. I suppose I can't really say I love the idea if it actually happened, but it's so easy to relate to. The first half is written ...

I'll try and build on what's already been mentioned, but mostly I have just a few minor errors to point out. Home was nowhere to be found. This reads, to ...

I love the way it's written. It sounds very archaic and like an old fairy tale, which I suppose was the effect you wanted. The whole piece is very cleverly ...

I've got a piece in need of a critique, if you have a moment. Title: Green with Envy Genre: Other Fiction Link: Thank you! :)

So, a critique. Well, to comment on the piece in general, quality of writing aside, this is quite clichéd. The love triangle between the cute guy who happens to be ...

This is an entry for the 'How far can you reach?' contest, which involved picture prompts. Said prompts can be found here ; I used the fourth one. All reviews ...

Just wanted to thank you all for the welcome - feels like I've been here for ages already. :)

Well, firstly, it IS very short, even for a prologue. It's so short, I question whether it's necessary for the following novel - if it is, then you could flesh ...

It's quite short, so I'll do you a line-by-line since there's no real plot to it. That's not a bad thing, by any means, though. My comments are in bold. ...

I love it, too. It's very original, and telling it from the "villain's" (if indeed the 'witch' is the villain in your tale) perspective will be fun to write as ...

I suppose this could be considered atheistic, in a way, but it fits the metaphor that you intended it to have even better. Oddly, I was reminded of Nazi Germany ...

This is a short piece, but it doesn't really live up to the term "short story". It's a little bit fragmented; I'm not fond of the dialogue, in particular. Harsh ...

If you can even write something cohesive in a Word War, and you clearly can, you deserve a medal. :P The product of my most recent Word War was a ...