Jetpack

Only French, other than English, of course. I opted for Ancient Greek rather than Spanish last year.

You get Pikachu. -insert coin-

This is quite a quirky story, and it was going well enough until I hit the end of the story. If I had to estimate that point, I'd say it ...

This is very short, even for a prologue. Is it finished? Are you intending to expand it at all? It seems somewhat rushed, and a bit sudden in its ending. ...

“You’re not real.” Metallic cells shudder; imaginary emotions surge through artificial matter. Intricate plastic, arranged in webs of confusion, leak paint or blood with silent efficiency. It is

You asked for shredding. I tried. :P She moved with agility, grace and slender that no human could possibly achieve I don't think 'slender' is a noun. Having just googled ...

Hi, I go by Jetpack. I see you're new, so hi. *waves* On YWS, there's a ratio of 2:1 of reviews to pieces of work you post. You've already got ...

I could probably have read your original, but maybe it would be better if I read this and judge it for what it is rather than comparatively. Hopefully you'll get ...

The title caught me, so I thought I'd give this a look. I'll start with nitpicks and some comments on word choice, and then a few more general opinions at ...

Hi. Skimming this, it sounds a lot like the sort of thing I like to write - a scene as opposed to a play, if you see what I mean. ...

Hi. As this is short, I think I'll just run through it and comment as I go, so prepare for a lot of me repeating myself. As Cotton said, I ...

Hi, I'll give you a review. Second vampire story of the day for me. I think the title is a little cliché. You could probably think of something a little ...

Hi. This is my first review in a few weeks, so my critiquing skills might be a little rusty. Nitpicks and so on: So many, that they do go unnoticed ...

Hi, want a review? All those innocent lives, But it's a living I guess Did you realise that you've repeated 'live'? It sounds sort of odd to the reader, especially ...

I've heard you're looking around for a review, so I figured I might oblige you. I've critiqued this as a piece of writing though, rather than the experience it must ...