Jetpack

Thanks for putting them in! Ah, so it was just your computer. I guess I was harsh then, so I apologise again. I would do nitpicks, but going through this ...

I am... Extraverted: 1% Intuitive: 50% Feeling: 25% Perceiving: 22% It recommends that I pursue writing. xD

I used to get that a bit. I think the worst bit is waiting for the reviews to come through, and not knowing whether it's good or bad. So like ...

7/10 I'm not sure I like the yellow lighting.

Right, all I really have to go through here are typos and nitpicks, since I really liked this. Your characterisation is absolutely brilliant and so is your dialogue, though sometimes ...

((Who's Desmond? I'm a bit lost. And sorry all my posts are so long!)) Jem. Easily depressed. Weather manipulation. Jem had barely squeezed her feet into a pair of neon ...

6/10 That's one of my dad's favourite films, but I haven't seen it, so it gets six. The Sixth Sense

Word Wars? A couple of timed wars might get people writing. They only have to be five, ten, fifteen minutes or so.

7/10 Was okay. The Beach.

Okay, what happened to the speech formatting? There are no speech marks. Why not? I've seen that done a couple of times in memories or suchlike, but usually it's only ...

7/10 I prefer the book. Top Gun :3

Okay, I wrote out a whole review and then my computer died, so now I have to redo. So really quickly this time. There's not enough grief. Your MC - ...

What do you mean, friendly banter pal? You've managed to make me sound like your drinking buddy. Welcome to YWS. Are you sure you don't want me to go over ...

I loved it. I've never read anything of yours before, so if this is you a little rusty, I must go and find out what you call top form. I ...

I hardly ever describe characters, because I can't visualise them at all. I write them into existence and even then I don't see them. I'm the same in books. I ...