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Opening this to requests again. I've taken off the guidelines on the first post of this thread, as even though I'm a little rusty, I'll review almost anything now - ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS, WhyteRose. I like the attached cover art at the bottom of the piece, by the way. Anyway, this will just be a general review, because Inbetweener ...

Hey, megsug, this is Jet dropping in for a review. I'm going to nitpick first, as this is very short, and I'm not sure there's much more to comment on ...

Hey, Tori. Before I start reviewing, I want to suggest that you space your writing out. It's much easier to read and more attractive to reviewers. Anyway, that aside, I'll ...

Hey, Jet here. I was going to split this in two and do a full review, but as you said you were thinking about narrative style, I'll start with that ...

If you're going to continue with this, I would spend the first chapter at least introducing these ideas into the text rather than using a preface. It's a useful summary ...

Hey, jemalew, and welcome to YWS! Two tips for posting work: the more you review, the more likely you are to get reviewed; and sometimes, with a long piece, it ...

Hi! Jet here for a quick review. Please excuse any errors, 'cause I'm out of practice at reviewing, but this caught my eye as I'm pretty interested in this period. ...

Nate's just being humble. There really is no site like YWS. ;) And as an ex-TWer, I'd say that other sites don't have anything like the same atmosphere (though YWO ...

Hi! Here for a quick review. I think the idea is sweet and succint, so I won't deal with that. In fact, I'm glad someone directly addressed the idea that ...

Hi! Jet, here. This sounds like a blurb, rather than a prologue. Was it intended as the former rather than the latter? I only ask because it seems that you ...

Hey! You're quite new here, I see, so I guess this review comes with a Please Don't Take This Too Harshly disclaimer. I won't nitpick through this grammatically because it's ...

Enyalius The dummy lay in shreds on the ground before the three spectators, with the jaguar lying in the midst of the debris, smiling . It was unnerving, how quickly ...

Hey, Firestalker. I've read the first half of this chapter and the reviews, so I hope I don't end up echoing what's been said before. I really enjoyed the story ...

((Fox, do you already have a planned ending for this? I'm just wondering where to go with it if we do this rebel attack on the castle.))