Jetpack

Okay, so we're waiting on going out to see Marrow, are we? Or will that be later? As for now, Cara and Java should probably try to get out of ...

I think this is a bit too confusing. You mention winning in the last line; winning against what exactly? Believing, as fhwdf said, in what exactly? The "something unworldly" is ...

Well, it doesn't have to be a real name. He's in the military. You could go with a nickname that the troops have given him - develop a background for ...

I have to go too; theatre trip to see All My Sons, yay. Will post here later.

Okays then. This is getting interesting. ^^

Let me know what you decide. If Java doesn't tell her, Cara will get suspicious and that might get in the way of their little relationship. Cara's a bit... paranoid, ...

Hello again. I figure I'd better try and answer your question to the best of my ability. I want to help you out with the thick prose as best I ...

((Thanks, Bolt. Nice avvie, btw, but won't that cause a bit of trouble? :S And Aqua, did Hannah become Rachel midway through your post? xD)) Cara/Death "The walls have ears, ...

7/10 Meh, I'm not a Paramore fan, and the "only one who's holy" thing makes me laugh. :P

8/10 Makes me laugh. Looks sort of... odd. xD

Aqua, hey there. I need a bit of a hand with this story I just posted. It's Romantic Fiction, about 900 words, called All of the Stars . I appreciate ...

Cara/Death "Um..." Cara looked helplessly at Java, who was caught somewhere between laughing and blushing, and back to Hannah, who was still holding out her hand. The younger girl's eyes ...

Heya, I'm Jet. I was going to welcome you to YWS, but then I realised you've been here for ages. Oops. So instead, I'll get on with the crit. Okay, ...

I write all my short stories longhand, and then type them up. That way, I'm not constantly focussing on word count and can't be distracted by the Internet and suchlike, ...

((*applauds 500th postness* And hey! This is my 333rd post. That counts for something. :P)) Cara/Death "Listen, I'm really sorry but there's been an "emergency" at home. I have to ...