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((Um, I'm waiting for Kaywiia to post, but I'm thinking we all try and meet up. Maybe that would keep things moving?))

Racing cars!

Enyalius "Well, the king ordered you back to the castle. He needed something from you. He sent me to find you." Enyalius vaguely recognised the pretty young woman standing before ...

I think Rosie picked out some of the nitpicks I was going to mention in her review above, so I'll just give you some general feedback. Don't take it the ...

I think Sureal pretty much covers it all in the above review. It sounds like you have an interesting fantasy world here, but you need to let us in slowly; ...

I was going to cover this line-by-line, but I've decided to give you a few general pointers on areas you need to improve on instead. If you want your writing ...

Enyalius Enyalius sped through the forest, his muffled strides slightly longer than the average human's and his swirling eyes that much keener. Escaping the palace had not been difficult, but ...

It was the reason I came back. I clicked a few of the links and then ended up surfing YWS for the first time in a few months, and after ...

Hi. I think I've seen you around, but we haven't spoken. I suppose this is a bit late seeing when you posted it, but a review's a review, right? Nitpicks ...

I am so sorry it's this long! I was just trying to get us going. Please take the time to read and hopefully we can go from here... I'll edit ...

Name: Prince Enyalius (I pronounce this en-yar-lee-us) Gender: Male Kind of Creature: Half-human, half-elven Personality: Brought up to be cold and calculating, Enyalius has perfected the art of decep

Could I reserve the Prince please? I haven't time to do a profile right now, but I could probably get one done tomorrow. EDIT: 400th post. :D

I like your premise with this little piece, but I think you've correctly identified your main problem in your introduction: some of your sentences are very clumsily worded and generally, ...

Vampires! Finally, I found one. I love reviewing these. I'll get going, I guess. She was just standing there, swaying in time with the music as she danced with her ...

Hey, Jet here. I'll give you a quick review, because I agree almost entirely with Rosalie on a lot of points. The story is a tad too cutesy when compared ...