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Hi, Elinor. I've not seen this before, so I'll try to give you a fresh perspective. Nitpicks It seems as only moments ago I had laid my head down on ...

Enyalius "You'll prove it to me?" he repeated, but Ren had left, the door swinging behind her. When he followed, Enyalius watched her melt into the crowd until he lost ...

At 02:20, on Monday 15th April, 1912, the Titanic finally slipped below the surface. She carried with her over 1500 men, women and children, and 700 survivors watched from the ...

Jet here for a quick review! I've read this a few times through, but I'll nitpick first rather than giving my impressions, as you've not had many language-related crits yet. ...

And the 'big girl' is, I confess, me. Ah! I knew it. :wink: I'm not sure what you mean here. :/ Could you explain it a bit better, please? And ...

Welcome to YWS, Quote. Nice username, by the way. I'm Jet, here to review this for you. I was going to nitpick, but your grammar's pretty much spot on, so ...

Hey! I'm Jet, here for a sci-fi review at last. It seems like you have an interesting story building here, and if your title's anything to go by it looks ...

Hey there, Jet here for a review. I'm not going to comment specifically on the plot here, since it's not really the focus of the piece. Instead, I'll refer to ...

I agree entirely with the above reviewer, but thought I'd comment just in case you needed a second opinion. All of this information has been dumped on us without ado. ...

Please could you review Pygmalion ? Any comments are welcome. My ego needs a knock. xD

Hi! I'll review your edited version, because there's always a few nitpicks that need picking up on. Sometimes life can feel as though you are trapped underwater, but I believed, ...

This is a great idea. I'll give you a quick review, because there isn't all that much to say. Don't sacrifice fluidity or interest for your narrator's voice. I think ...

Done, Phoenix! Thanks for the request. Anyone else?

Here as requested, so I'll get straight to it. I agree entirely with the first reviewer on the awkwardness of the opening. It's not all that interesting to read, either, ...

Enyalius "You've yet to tell me your name," Enyalius said, lingering in the corner of the bedroom as the young woman stared out of the window, back towards the forest. ...