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This thread is so awesome. Jenson Button.

((It's kinda gone all over the place because we weren't really sure... If Fox posts again with Cassie turning up with Nightfall, she could then lead them both to the ...

Enyalius "My father's reputation goes before me, I see," Enyalius muttered to Ren in between the seas of people seeking an audience with their leader. "Tell me, how are you ...

Of course posting it wasn't a bad idea! The whole reason we post work is so we can get better. I've posted work here too as a newbie; everybody has, ...

All done, Leilani. Any more requests?

Hey, Leilani! I love your username. Welcome to YWS. I'm here as requested for a review. Nitpicks Haha. I’m Ted Riley. And this is 94.1.” Love. I hate love. Never ...

This is the first time I've done this kind of review in a long while. My corrections and suggestions are in bold . The troopers soon all woke up, and ...

Chapter 1, here we go. Nitpicks The vehicle rattled on the desert floor. The ground was hard and almost nothing grew. I'm not in love with this opening: two very ...

Jessie, 17:00, April 11th 1912 The man had been decidedly unappreciative of her attention, she had concluded, which was why he had responded in such a dull manner. Jessie was ...

((It's all fine. I'm going to do two posts, and one will cover the next morning.)) Jessie, 19:30, April 10th 1912 As she left the dining room, Jessie passed a ...

((Thanks muchly, Elinor. I'll slip into past tense again, then, so we're all on the same page.)) Jessie, 13:50, April 10th 1912 The launch had come and gone, and with ...

Yuri's given you a great review above, so I think my job has been reduced. Here as requested, though, and I'll give you a general review. Description This mainly concerns ...

Yes, I do. I shouldn't, but I do. Especially if it's sci-fi. :D A checklist, then. Lightning Platoon 106 Prologue Lightning Platoon 106 Chapter 1 Part 1 Lightning Platoon 106 ...

((Well, we're heading to rebel base camp. Ren has proposed that the rebels plan to overthrow King Gryk, kill him, and instate Enyalius as the new king, though she's yet ...

((I'm not posting again today until someone posts a launch piece, so that everyone gets their penny's worth in. The last person to post their "introduction" - or first character ...