Jetpack

((Well, if you haven't read the DT, we're moving this out of real time because it's getting too fast. I'm going to keep listing days, but not times.)) Jessie, April ...

You could always say "no emo pictures" or, you know, make people write descriptions. For a while, written descriptions was all storybook leaders wanted if I remember correctly. This. I'm ...

Back again, for another review. I'm stalking your novel. 8) “I’m sure,” I grumbled at the boy. “Today is your first big assignment.” I don't think you can really "grumble ...

Another great read; this is shaping up so well. I'm also unsure about the start of the chapter, though. It's too repetitive; the problem with the structure you're using is ...

That's absolutely fine by me. I don't want to restart either, but I wondered if anyone else felt we should. In that case, I think I'll just continue from where ...

This is more a "I spend too much time reviewing on YWS" moment, but my brothers were talking about some trouble they'd been in last summer and the youngest one ...

I'm also slightly lost as to where the conflict is here. It doesn't have to be literal; perhaps elaborate on Sleeping Beauty's death by wax tears. You could make the ...

Banned for using the same location as I had a few months back. Spooky.

Hey, TSW. Here's a belated welcome to YWS. I've read the first chapter and now this, and I have to say, you have me hooked. I'll try to cover the ...

((Anyone think there's a case for restarting, if we ditch the real time prospect? Same characters, obviously. In fact, to save cluttering this further, head to the rather unloved discussion ...

For having managed to use the word "lavender" in both a username and location. Skills.

((I'm thinking we should take this out of real time, because two days have already gone and there's been less time than I thought for development of any sort. Opinions?))

Hi, ziggiefred. I'm in awe of your prolific reviewing, so when I saw this, I thought I'd comment. As always, nitpicks and grammar concerns are first, followed by some general ...

Welcome to YWS! I read over the first half of this chapter the other day and meant to give you a review, but it seems that you've had a couple ...

Hey, Jet here for a review. Nitpicks first, and then some more general comments. I wasn't a complete freak, I laughed and had crushes and acted like a silly teenager ...