Jetpack

Wow, we went past it so quickly I never even saw 0! Straight to -2 and beyond. :D I've done more than I thought I would today, so I'm off. ...

Hey, Panda, and welcome to YWS! So, I agree with Hawk that some of this could be clearer. I was confused as to how many characters were present, and we ...

Hey, Alpha. As you have a brilliant content-based review above, I think I'll spend most of this review nitpicking and checking this for typos. I think it's a lot easier ...

Hey, EloquentDragon. I love your username, by the way. Anyway, on with the review. I'm slightly confused as to what this is. You mention that these are the first paragraphs ...

Hey, f4wir. I'm Jet. I've read the first chapter of this that you've posted, and I notice immediately that you've switched the perspective from Dakota to a pack. Perhaps you ...

Hey, Wheadee, here to review Chapter 2! Or at least this part of it. Spork's done a good job of nitpicking above, so I won't go through and do the ...

Back to review Chapter 3, TT. I have much the same points to make as last time, but I won't spend too long going over ground that I covered in ...

I've only written short stories for about four years. I don't plot much, if at all, but I tend to spend up to half an hour staring into space and ...

Hey, TT. If you try to post your work one chapter at a time, you'll get far more reviews than you have done here. Plus, the more you review, the ...

Hey, Wheadee. I'll give a quick general review as your grammar and punctuation is generally fine. Could I suggest you make a novel page for this? It's so much easier ...

Finished, Skins. :) Any more requests, anyone?

Hi, Nike. So I read your spoiler and saw that this was based on Phil of the Future , which I loved a few years back, so I decided to ...

Here to review Part Five. Having something that was so complicated worrying me was a lot more painful than being unable to tie some stupid knot. This is really awkward. ...

Hey. I know you've already cut this down, and it actually reads very smoothly - and is engrossing - when you get past the first scene, but unfortunately I think ...

Hey, here as I said, to review. I love the atmosphere of this piece, but I wish it were a little longer. I'll nitpick first, as per usual. It reminds ...