Jesse

K im gonna start reading and just review as i go along. "NO!" Tarah huffed, her emotions pouring. I didnt like the word pouring here "No! Get away from me!" ...

As soon as i read this i thought about that one person for me. I got over her now anyway. Thank god :) haha. All I have to say is ...

Ill start off with the compliments. Your imagery is crazy good, I just started reading not to long ago, but this is the best Ive seen yet. That first paragraph ...

Hey i really liked this. My only advice to make it more professional would be to drop the last stanza. But I bet those lines have lots of meaning to ...

Hey, I started reading through and became more interested than i planned on being this late at night. Im gonna sit down tomorow after school and read through all of ...

This was very heartfelt and sincere it seems. By dropping a few sentences here and there and changing a couple words around it could look more professional. Dropping the last ...

Heavy German accents coated their deep voices. The only thing i didn't go for was your word choice here.I just think of Heavy to be a old man kind of ...

She comes and goes. Teasing and flirting, Then disappears. She comes out to play, Then fades away, Without a word. Shows a heartbreaking smile, That draws away my fear, Then ...

haha beautiful description of what seems to be an everyday occurrence

Hey readers, this is Jesse. Thank you for you previous reviews. I have been writing like crazy lately and this is just a few pages of what I came up ...

I realize that this is only the first draft and it sounds like you have a ton of passion for writing this. With that being said id like to point ...

The only thing i can think of to help you out is in line "Before the world came crashing down, and ending to your loving fantasy." I'm almost positive you ...

The result of me bored on a Saturday without my writing book after reading a couple depressing poems. Just quickly done and i don't normally write poems or depressing stuff, ...

Simply Epic. But i dont recall hearing about an event such as this

Hey everyone. My names Jesse. I'm from a small town in Saskatchewan Canada and have a growing passion for reading and writing. My oldest brother introduced me to the first ...