Jess_14

thank you so much for all of your feedback :) this poem was written in about 3 minutes right before rushing off to class, with little editing, so it's bound ...

hmm this is not good that you think the person kills themselves at the end, because what i was trying to go for is that through all the loneliness and ...

This poem is pretty cruddy. But please tell me what you think! :) Ground Zero I watched you two meet ends as you wove yourself throughout the room. I've stared ...

This is so beautiful in it's simplicity! The only thing I would change though, is move the "a constant" (3rd stanza, third line) to the beginning of the fourth line. ...

I liked this poem a lot when I first read it, but after reading Claudette's corrections, I loved it! Great job, and I agree, I looved the part about pearls ...

Thanks you guys so much I'll be sure too try rewriting it. I pretty much thought it was a doomed poem, but your comments saved my belief in my own ...

Aw thanks :) But which parts confuse you? Let me know so I can see what I can do about it. =)

Thanks so much for your feedback ^_^

It sounds funny :D It's a simple poem. Nothing special, but I like it.

Plea of Moments past, what weakness gives us My short tandem of reality, unmolded by words, forever swaying my trust gets portrayed as a vision by the little people, in ...

Enjoy :D

This poem was too abstract and that made it hard to read, so I think you need to simple it a bit and try to get your point across more ...

This is such an amazing, heartflelt poem. Although I agree with Brad, some of the lines were a little cliche, I don't think it really matters, because this poeem has ...

I did, indeed. :D And once again, I am in love with this poem. Good luck! (not that you need it, hehe)

Broken Mother When I'm about to walk into a disaster, I know what's to become of it. For even the greatest amateur artists are cursed, With the gift of keeping ...