Jesise

Okay, well, I'm always for Constructive Critism, and here is what I want reviewed. Soaring Oblivion Never before inside, Have I felt quite like this. This blissful, soaring oblivon, I ...

This was amazing, and a really good read! What I love, and what I really think that you pulled of well, was the repetitions. You managed to keep using them ...

It left me hanging backwards I rode two on the tracks breaking free, I'm alone Said you would see me on a warm summer's day You had me breaking farther ...

Wow! This was really good, and easy to read and follow. I can't wait to see where you will take this story, and what kinds of dangers will arrive, for ...

I read this not long ago (along with Eragon) and I LOVED both. (The movie is good - if you haven't read the books.) Oromis and his dragon - yes, ...

Leave time for joyfulness For hopefulness, and sadness, Yet nought forget the lot For gifts like theses are treasures That never can be bought Set aside time for playing For ...

Wow! I really loved this. I noticed that you captured family life really well - and mixing in the royalty part worked terrifically! This was quite a believable first chapter. ...

Thanks! I've fixed most of the things you mentioned, though I've kept the chapter the same, because about her family is something I want to put in another chapter. As ...

The moonlight’s pale glow shone through the cracked bedroom window, bringing with it a cool gust of wind. Reagan shivered. The log cabin she lived in with her aunt, uncle ...

I loved this! It was easy to read, easy to follow. Your sentences flowed together like water running in a river. Your use of connection adds more to the work: ...

Overall, your story here seems to have been well-thought out, and you seem to know what you are doing. The flow sounds good, but I did notice a few typos. ...

I can't wait to read your novel! Anyways, do you think that mentioning that there is already a demand for your book would (possibly!) help get them hooked? I've heard ...

*cries* That was absolutely brillant. I too wonder why some people would deny it happening. I find your poem has very deep emotion, and I like that. I don't think ...

Her very great-grandfather, Of wide reknown, Had a dream. We all know him from science class, From his great findings. Galileo Galilei, her grandfather. He dreamed about the stars at ...