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Re: Faith
This is more a self reflective poem than a religious one. For those who are having trouble finding finding the plot line, Its a about the moment I stopped believe ...
Sep 1, 2011 -
Re: The ugly truth
Hello, I'm here to review. People might look at this poem and denounce it because it against what they believe in. I don't agree with the other reviewers, just because ...
Sep 1, 2011 -
Re: soliloquy
Hello, I have come to review but I have a feeling this one won't be too long, I have a feeling is poem will be quite good. Now the opening ...
Aug 31, 2011 -
Re: Madness
Hello, I have come to review. Prologue: Now I like the start, I get a real feel for the character and the story within the first couple of sentences, I ...
Aug 31, 2011 -
Re: Sidhe PD Chapter 1
This sounds a lot like a series i read called the Dresden Files and an other story of mine which features a half fairy doctor, who also solves mysteries part ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Black & White Style
Hello, Its been a while since I prowled the art section but here I go. In general this is quite good. You have shown a great level of skill and ...
Aug 27, 2011 -
Re: Are you planning on purchasing the Journal?
I would buy it but no one In my family has the means of buying it. No credit cards or visas. :(
Aug 27, 2011 -
Re: Love and fifty dollars
Lovely poem. A great piece of narrative poetry. I loved the idea of concept and the placement of dialogue in italics within your poem, really gave it an original touch. ...
Aug 27, 2011 -
Re: Nameless - 3
I desperately need help with the dialogue and its structure. There will be grammar issues. The spacing is a little strange on YWS, please try to ignore it. He heard ...
Aug 27, 2011 -
Re: Rain
Hello, I have come to review. Now the first thing I noticed was the strange structure. You seem to jump from short one word lines to a whole big paragraph. ...
Aug 25, 2011 -
Re: The Exodus of the Insane (Started, Accepting By PM)
No longer participating, sorry There are so many male characters I might as well make a female one. Name: River or Rain ( depending on what sort of personality she ...
Aug 20, 2011 -
Re: Why I'm here: A Freak attempts to explain himself
Hello, I can't literally hear you :smt002 but I'm getting you loud and clear. But never the less a nice little intro, I don't know if your talking about yourself ...
Aug 20, 2011 -
Re: The Cows
We can see that old man by the river. His herd drinking from tepid waters. His hands worn down from eons of toil under a hot bleeding sun. As he ...
Aug 20, 2011 -
Re: The Teenager's Guide to Exorcism - Chapter One (1)
I'm planing to read your other chapters so I might as well give the first one a review. Okay first sentences are important. Your first sentence is quite good. I ...
Aug 18, 2011 -
Re: The Office
I need a little help with this. It's unfinished but it for school and I need the grades. This is a very rough draft, please give critic. Thanks! Meredith frowns, ...
Aug 13, 2011
