Jennafina

NaNoWriMo Characters: Mert: Of course! Loving's fun, no matter how it ends. I wouldn't miss it for anything. Tacy: Well, no, seeing as you end up in the same place ...

(if u saw someone murder your parents, what would be your reaction?) Um... Probably a strangled cry of greif/rage. If I was articulate enough to formulate a response with words, ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! There are a number of small punctuation errors, that could be corrected fairly easily. Here are the ones I noticed in chapter one and chapter two. ...

That's cool! Though, I think in Japan they count the number of fingers that are down, not up. Acording to my Japanese teacher. :) I like Kumi. The fireworks one ...

You are absolutely wonderful at drawing folds in fabric! *colapses with jealousy* I really like their costumes, too. Very creative. I hope I'm not sounding rude when I say this, ...

Hello! It's cool that you're writing a book. I hope you like YWS, and stick around! Is there a nickname you prefir to be called? lillizard is kind of a ...

Please add more paragraphs! It's so hard to see... *sob* Anyway, this looks interesting, and I thought you had a good idea about how to make it original. When the ...

#1 looks like it should be on the cover of a Greenday album, lol. :) So does #2. Cool animation on #3. I like your 3-D lettering on #4, but ...

Title: The Sight That Caroline Sees (No apostrophy in sees, everything should be capitalized.) “Where sorry kido there was nothing you could do well be investigating it I’m afraid we ...

You seem to have left out quite a few words and letters. I think you should try reading this aloud to yourself, it might help you find them. Also, anywhere ...

I like it! I noticed you have a bit of inconsistancy with the capitalization. Sometimes you capitalize only the first letter in the sentence, and sometimes you capitalize the first ...

Usually my characters are my age or younger, just out of laziness. I have no idea what it's like to be 21. That's kind of bad, because often I accidentally ...

Wow. I think the creepiest thing about this is how friendly it all seems. Like you're discribing Hello Kitty or something else cute. I think you might have mentioned something ...

the thing is this flower is something kids to do just get out of taking notes.. Nah... Those types don't have awesome viney leaves colored in varrying shades of green. ...

I liked how the narator was running away from ritches, not poverty. That was a really unusual twist, and it sepperated your story from others with similar themes. I had ...