Jennafina

Hey Cookie! The first thing I noticed is that you've got some serious description. That's great, and I like the words you chose a lot, but I think it would ...

Please critique two other things for each story you post of your own. :) Moving quickly XXXXX darted across the area in front of him and reached the desk and ...

Granted, but it's so bright everyone has to wear sunglasses all the time. I wish I didn't have to get off line in ten minutes.

The ice cold water of the swamp was smooth as glass, and when I stuck my oar in to row, it seemed that I had shattered a forbidden window. Woah. ...

I like your title! Please double space your dialogue and paragraphs. :) Luke's right, you do say 'then' a lot. That can be easily fixed, though. The soft buzzing noise ...

Please double space your paragraphs! It'll make it six zillion times easier to read. That's how she felt, confused, walking in the sky, head in the thick factory smog that ...

Mmm... cookies! ^_^ Welcome to YWS! I also like puppies, though I think kittens are cooler. Speaking of randomness... Random questions! What is your favorite type of thing to write? ...

You and Vernon are so cute. XD I really like the way you repeat some lines in different contexts. It's repetitive, but not annoying at all. It makes it sweet, ...

Cool! Monkeys won. what? XD I mean, I voted monkey. But what does the mascot actually do?

Do you think you could post them here?

Sab- If you had something planned, I could delete my post. It's not that great anyway. Want me to?

Me too. ^_^

XD Me too Nate.

Welcome, friend of Fand. *melodramatic bow* I hope you like the site! ^_^

XD Very cool, Grif! I love the end of the first one. I laughed a lot. One thing: Smaur was naked on an operating table. I think you should mention ...