Jennafina

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Sorry, I dont exell at spelling and grammer. I suck, actualy. It doesn't help that the spell check on my computor is broken, I know its not an excuse. Ill ...

Well.. um.. Thats my story. Pathetic title, i know. coments would be EXTREMELY APRECIATED!!!

CAPTUREING!! Nice imagery. I will never look at a moth trying to get in the window again. Seriously.

It has a really nice, atherial, whispy quality. I really like it.

Your poem is haunting. I like the part about ailing children and smog and forests and things. But I agree that the last line seams a little out of place. ...

It is most definately worth continueing!!! I love the lump. I just want to hug him! Jasper seems like a cool charecter too, I love how she's not all perfect. ...

I like it. Its funny. I dont really understand it though. Will there be a part two?

well.. Um.. Heres my story.. I just edited.. The water was dripping, she didn’t even have a chance to turn off the faucet. Saundra May Jones died, right before turning ...

Wow.. your poem is SPECTACULAR!!! I absolutely LOVE IT!!! I really like all the imagery in it. It gives a picture almost. I love dark poetry.