Jennafina

I love this! Easy to memorize, but thats good, right? Its awesome how you can capture a whole emotion in just a few lines. Poems don't have to be long ...

I like the parenthacies too. Its a clever idea.

I really like the poem, it feals heartfealt, but I'm confused. Are you talking about your boyfriend? or your mom? There are times in this pale house While you're out ...

I liked this peom a lot, this part was my favorite. The heartbeat of a strummer’s bass-line delight the wrinkling anticipation that caused us all to fade with you behind ...

Thanks What steps should I take to inprove my sentance structure? Should I try not to put the same word in twice in two sentances? Not say she instead of ...

Thanks! :)

The poem seamed like it was describeing someone elses life, and was a little unclear. I did like how it flowed though. It had a nice ring, almost like a ...

Your poem is interesting. It flows well, but I can't tell if you are trying to make it rhime or not.

I agree with Liz. The atmosphere is really nice, and the whole poem has a magical quality, like shadows.

Running, Falling, Feral gong, Mistic, Morbid, Haunting song. Pheonix feather, Sprightly elf, Dishes, Falling, Off the shelf. Shattered, Broken, Beyond repair, Words unsaid, And things unfair. Cold and

Hmmm.. Your poem sounds more apologetic than apreciative... With bitter undertones.. Poor daddy. Ouch.

For some reason it seams like a strobe light. Like disjointed images put togather to make your poem. That probably doesn't make any sence, does it..

You're poem is funny. Comical. I like all that stuff about him breaking you're wrist. :)

I like it. It has a sad, antique fealing about it. I, not really sure exactly what its about, but it seams like a dream maybe, or a memory..

I can relate to this. There are quite a few people I know that fit your discription. Nothing wrong with a little healthy anger... :p