Jemima

you're writing has improved. I really liked this chapter because you have used more detail and emotion. I cant wait for the next chapter. I like this bit the best ...

I really liked ur story. I hope u add more to it. I like ur description of the demon ex friend Mazin just ignored Kizame, and walked towards her. To ...

i loved it there was mistakes which can always be fixed.I loved this bit it seems the more realisticly detailed. Rosaline laughed. “Yeah, this is just like the end – ...

I thought ur first chapter was good, you're writings has improved. I like how u gave ur main character more of personality. I liked this part she really seems parnoid. ...

I would really like to find out what she was thinking, more expression. This story seemed like you skipped a lot of the plot. But I think its a great ...

WOW. I liked the tensity of this story. I want to know what happens to Seb and Jade. Does he quite his drug addiction, or doesn't she give him the ...

Reading that a second time actually didn't make the flashback confusing for me. The principal must be scary, especially since she's wearing canary yellow. I think you should write more ...

thanks deavarna_satina for you're advice, Iv edited my story making most of the changes.

I got what you meant by you're poem, it was sad and emotional, even though you wrote it n 10 mins.

I really like you're story, it was imaginative and creative.

thanks for you're advice I'll make the changes as soon as possible.

I'm still editing and changing this story. I wanted to find out what other people have to think about it. “You don't love someone for their looks, or their clothes, ...

I thought it was good, but the flashback was really confusing. Maybe you should say its a flash back in your story.

hi guys, i'm Jemima