Jay

This was very realistic, honest and funny. The ending leaves on a bit of a cliffhanger, but not too much so as to leave the reader disappointed. It makes me ...

Wow, that was intense. I'm actually relieved it was just a dream (or was it?...). The beginning had me thinking it was going to be a relaxing, nice dream, then ...

The dialogue here is great, and I love the gory description of Henry's body. It seems almost comical how the body fell through the ceiling and landed on his desk, ...

I'm pretty confused with this. Are the seperate "parts" a series of letters or diary entries the protagonist is writing? I really enjoyed the first part, but from there it ...

The title is intriguing, and this is a solid, entertaining chapter. The mood is kept fast and light, with little hints of suspense. I'm not usually a fan of apocalyptic-type ...

This was an eerily moving piece for its length. I haven't read any of your other Mutts stories, so I'm just seeing this a vacuum, shall we say. It's a ...

This is such a creative and original idea! The only issue I have with it is that in the beginning, there's a brief introduction to Mattae, then it goes straight ...

I loved this-it was an action-filled, funny and entertaining beginning. When it says: "purred the Sinefesh which called itself Jonathan Kraw", it should be "who called himself Jonathan Kraw" 'The ...

“What are the damages to the ship?” She asked, should say "What are the damages to the ship?" she asked. A solid and promising start. I'm starting to like Jo's ...

This was so lovely and heartwarming. Most of the writing here is very angsty and dramatic, so this was a refreshing change of pace. The use of imagery is great ...

Use "sarcastic" instead of "sarcasting", and make sure I as a proper noun is always capitalized. Say "everyone" instead of "every one". "Firey" should be "fiery" And say "weak hearts" ...

This is a really entertaining and heartfelt introduction, as well as being refreshingly realistic. Although it's fantasy there's a central theme that a teenager can relate to-that of failing to ...

I liked this-firstly because of the style. Your style is distinctive from everyone else here, and this passage is written with a unique voice. Will this be continuing? If so, ...

It's a dramatic and emotional beginning that keeps the reader guessing (Where is he in the second chapter? Why is he being chased? And who is the screaming woman?) Near ...

It's certainly a good passage, but I need more information to be sure (I tentatively voted 7-9). Is this the beginning? It's a very gripping excerpt and I want to ...