Jay

What's Twilight? You don't want to know. Of course, I'm biased, seeing as I dislike werewolves, vampires, and love stories. So make of that what you will.

Sounds like Adventure to me.

Maus, which is like a comic book love story about WW2 and the Holocaust. The Jews are represented as mice, the Germans are cats, and the Polish are pigs. It's ...

I love the way the characters interact with each other. Natura's interactions with her family and Christiana are very realistic. I also like the balance between the realism and the ...

Wow, you've definitely spent a lot of time and effort on this, and I applaud you for that. It's very large-scale and serious. What age group are you aiming for ...

The up side: This is so polished and realistic. It is detailed without becoming bogged down, and the pacing is fresh and lively. The down side: Renee sounds like Genevieve's ...

This is a powerful and promising opening with a lot of detail. It could be improved a lot by cutting out some of the longer sentences. It is not necessary ...

Wow, this is very polished and professional! The protagonist's feelings are very convincing and realistic, as is her relationship with her mother. And this is coming from someone who doesn't ...

Hi, welcome to YWS! We have a policy that you have to review two pieces for every bit of work you submit, so you have to do 2 reviews to ...

I wrote a story involving a high school aged goddess who played a mentor role to the main character. She turned out to be quite the Mary Sue. I like ...

Hey, I've been waiting for the next part of this story! I think it's gone a little downhill, to be honest. When it started out, I really liked the upbeat, ...

Can your friend think of a better name than 'The Death Trilogy'? If I saw something on the shelf entitled 'The Death Trilogy' I wouldn't want to read it. It ...

Hi Heidi! I hope you have fun here. If you put up a story or a poem, send me a PM and I'll see if I can write a review.

Well, I don't usually like things that involve "cold, dark, and reeking of bodily fluids, split and rotting flesh". The phrase 'his knuckles started to turn black and blue, and ...

I've developed a very methodical and efficient way of writing. I think of the idea, and plan out each chapter. Then I start working on it, and I can never ...