Jasmine

The only suggestion I have for you is to try to eliminate repetition in sentence. It was done once or twice, and I see that they were already corrected by ...

As Ryan pulled of to the old school, he felt a rush of nostalgia. The old brick building showed its age, and yet as he stepped through the main doors ...

"As the brave, I march up to the front, Side by side, The brave march up to the front, For those of the coward, Fight alone, next to none, But ...

Although short, I found it very interesting, mainly because of being involved in a similar situation. I have many of those questions myself. I'd like to read more, though. More ...

Yeah, it was a little short but it's been so long since I've written it that I wasn't sure how to lengthen it without really putting myself mentally back into ...

This is beautiful. The topic itself is going to bring about emotion, but the way you've written it in a letter to a loved one just makes this piece. I ...

This is just something I wrote when my boyfriend and I were going through a rough patch. We broke up for a time just because things were feelign different for ...