JaneThermopolis

I actually really liked this poem, except I have one small suggestion. "I wither. I'm torn." Maybe you should put a comma between wither and I'm like: "I wither, I'm ...

This was a pretty interesting story, it kept my attention for a very long time, and I was curious to see what Smith was going to do. You have a ...

This was awesome! Great job!

A parody of the song "You Belong With Me" by Taylor Swift. Not meant to offend any geeks/nerds/trekkies. Verse 1: You're on the phone with your gamer friend he's upset, ...

What I had in mind is that she doesn't work directly with the CIA, but she helps them out in various instances.

I really like this piece, especially how you compared bullies to pack animals. Bullying is one of the worst things that goes on in high schools across the country, and ...

Thanks for the crits!!!! :)

I loved that instead of thinking in a human's perspective, you thought of what the letter would think (if it actually had thoughts.) Forestqueen basically pointed out all the nitpiks ...

You really have two ideas coninciding with one doesn't make the best of sense. The reader just ends up being confused. At least maybe keep the writer interested while still ...

I actually really liked this. I see what your getting too...and I wish I could relive those times too...when we didn't have to worry about much, because we were little ...

We sat in the car, riding along the thruway; myself with a bag of Lay's, my mother holding onto the steering wheel. I stared out the window for a long ...

I also agree with what Story Weaver said: The more drama in a haiku, the better!!! However, I applaud you for writing a haiku!! (They're my favorite form of poetry). ...

Interesting poem. The title of the poem definitely suits the poem, because the start of every stanza was "romance is....." It actually is a pretty good poem, but I found ...

I really liked this poem, fantastic imagery. I also love how you didn't capitalize the beginning of every line (kind of like e.e. cummings) because it gives the poem a ...

Undercover Chapter 1 Place: Bay City, Massachusetts, United States. Port 59 Time: January 14, 10:45 P.M. Objective: Unidentified A small light flickered on in the second story window of the ...