Jamie_rocks

Okay thanks Ali. And no offense taken. This is a lot of help. I'm rewriting this now. I'm going to go ahead and switch it around, starting with the girls ...

Okay, thanks. The second chapter is out, and the third is in progress. I'll rewrite the first two when I post the third.

Okay, thanks. When I've finished the next part I'll revise this and post them together. I think I'm going to change the format though. The main story takes place when ...

(This story begins after Ariel saves Prince Eric from the ship wreck. She is in her room in the palace in Atlantica. P.S. there's a lot of dialogue and it's ...

Okay, thanks again Scasha. I'm horrible with typos. Guess I'll rewrite again, then. Thanks for everything.

Okay thanks. Actually, it's a note written from an admirer that just revealed herself. But that helps. Thanks!

I totally agree with you guys about the whole reject thing. In my opinion though, ti's more fun once you hit puberty and everybody's not friends. I don't know, it ...

You've moved around a lot. One of the best things about being in the military, you get to see a lot of sights. I've never been home schooled, but I've ...

As I said, my name's Jamie. I joined a few months ago, but I just found this forum. I doubt anyone cares, but this is me. I'm thirteen, going into ...

Okay, I edited it. I think I got all the typos, I'm not sure though. Thanks for everything. I'm working on the next part now.

Hmmm, okay, you said you couldn't think of how to continue? That depends on what type of story you want this to be. Romance? Horror? Adventure? If you want, PM ...

Hey everyone, please let me know what you think and if there's any grammar errors :) oh and if you think of better male names for the MC's please let ...

Okay, I'm almost done with the next part. Thanks!

I'm back! Okay, I'm not going to nitpick because I really hate dealing with that and it looks like those were taken care of. Once again, great job keeping up ...

Okay, I'll do that. The next chapter is almost done, and once it is I'll edit this and post them together. As for the comments, we need all the girls, ...