Jamie_rocks

Okay, the newly edited first chapter to my supernatural novel.

Hey, sorry I haven't been on in a while; the computer was down. I'll do my best to get caught up.

Hmm, I'd say 9/10. It seems interesting, but the blurb and cover art would be the hit or miss. My idea: The Revenge (Questioning Title) Annie was five years old ...

Okay, I'll look at it. In the future, when you need something reviewed, go to the "Will Review for Food" forum. It's in The Lounge. Just post the link to ...

Okay thanks. I did do the * thing after those first few paragraphs, though. As for Kamren though, I know a nine year old who is in love with Chris ...

Okay, thanks everyone. I can't rewrite now because I'm working on revising chapter two, but I'll fix the nitpicks.

I'm here by request! This is a story that I decided to write inspired by me and a friend. We were talking about what we would name our child, when ...

Okay, thanks. This helps a lot. :) Thanks for telling me about the confusion, I'll have to fix those up.

Come on people! Give me something to review. I'm bored out of my wits!

Hi, I know you said you prefer poetry, but I really need critiques on this. It's the first chapter of a supernatural novel. Please be as harsh as you can, ...

Hmmm, I'd give it a 9/10. I love the whole mix between fantasy and technology. It also sounds like a very interesting plot; the only reason it's not a full ...

Okay thanks everyone, especially the line-by-line. Avens: I just had a few comments on some of the points you made. 1. When you were commenting on the note, I couldn't ...

Okay, here's one that badly needs to be shredded. Sorry, it's kind of long. I'm mainly worried about dialog, character development, and if you think it's too rushed. Thanks in ...

Don't worry, it's not romantic. Anyway, I d say it's a fantasy. This Ellima chick (I assume it's a girl) must for some reason go find this Cerulean Chrystal. It's ...

I'm back. Okay, the link is: P.S. I give points to good reviewers