JRaye

Alright, i know this poem isn't the greatest ever written, but i consider it the first major poem i have ever wrote, i wrote it in 6th grade, and it ...

I liked it The machines flourish and the humans decline. The youth waits for their bodies to resign. The work is increasing, the people diminishing. Now, thousands more died, endlessly ...

I enjoyed it, but man, reading this can cause guilt like you wouldn't believe. It's good though, it adds to the feeling of the poem, and I like how it ...

A great poem, i really enjoyed it, espeacially how she fought back at the end. but wings are for angles not for whores. i'm going to assume you meant angels ...

I like the poem, but i get a little confused in the second stanza. At first you talk about closeing up and not letting anyone in, then suddenly you start ...

Alright, i'm just putting this out there, but the punctuation and the number of lines in the stanzas... They are meant to be there!!! They are there to help emphasize ...

We are the ones, you laugh at and tease. We are the ones, you take from as you please. We play with our toys, our videogames, our cards. While you ...

Wow, i really enjoyed that poem. but there was two lines that were a bit confusing. The thing that's haunting Is me without you. It's the is that doesn't sound ...

I liked it, it brings up a good point about the little things in life but i'm having trouble connecting the second stanza to the rest of the poem. Did ...

I liked it, i could relate to it well, where at the time you don't like a person, then you realize later that they were trying to help you. I ...

I enjoyed the poem, but maybe you don't have to continue rhymeing. If you took the last line you have written, and put that into a new stanza, it would ...

I enjoyed it, when i was reading it, I felt as if i had just joined the circus and was getting a walk though of how everything worked. it definetly ...

The Serendipity Theory The definition for serendipity in the dictionary is the making of lucky discoveries by chance. The word I want to emphazise is chance. That is one of ...