JFW1415

I'm sorry you're sick, but luckily this still won't effect me. I'm up to my ears in homework. :shock: This will make me stop procrastinating! Hopefully I can finish checking ...

Told you I'd forget. :wink: Again, I'll try to get to this to critique fully, but please don't yell at me if I don't. I have a bad memory, and ...

Honestly? This is not a prologue. As I was reading, I thought you accidently put this here. It looks like the beginning of a StoryBook. I don't think this should ...

I would talk forever, If someone wanted to listen. I won't smoke. Never. Not even if someone handed a lighter and package to me. I have friends - no bests. ...

[s]Banned for having barely any reviews.[/s] Matt beat me. Banned for having so many more posts than reviews. ~JFW1415

Hello! I love most of the music you do. Paramore=love. I've already reviewed two of your pieces, and it looks like your a great writer. A wonderful addition to the ...

Hello again! Same format as always. Highlighted Comments 1. Very confusing beginning. I’d suggest something more like: ‘When I was fourteen…’ Also, this is pure telling. Slip these details int

I'm back! Please don't kill me if I repeat people. :wink: The numbers next to the highlighted parts correspond with the 'highlighted comments' below. Highlighted Comments 1. This could be ...

Aw, I'm sorry, Mark! *Hugs* These are the horses I work with *cough*will-steal-one-day*cough* at the barn! I'll try not to post too much...heehee. That's Leo. He's the horse I ride ...

I liked it. ;P I can't give a very good critique, as I don't do poetry, but Vernon's been making everyone in the chat read this. :P One comment: I ...

I second all above opinions. :wink: But you have experienced a lot - the emotions, at least. If you've lost a grandparent but not a brother, just bring back that ...

Sorry in advance if I repeat any! -'A pessimist sees the difficulty in every opportunity. An optimist sees the opportunity in every difficulty.' Winston Churchill. -'Never let the fear of ...

Hello! The review, as asked for. The numbers next to the highlighted parts correspond with the 'highlighted comments.' The red are typos/grammar mistakes. Pages one and two down the first ...

Highlighted Comments 1. Expand. Emotion, please? 2. Don’t repeat; I’d ditch this word. 3. Good actions, but expand the emotions. Also, what do the sheets feel like? His warm body? ...

Here's the revised version of He's Just Human , with a new title. There is one swear (mild) in this part. Currently being edited.