JFW1415

The promised critique! Please don't be mad at me. In your original post you said just be general, but you just posted saying you wanted us to be nit-picky, so ...

Hello again! Same format as always. Highlighted Comments 1. Re-look at this. I’m not sure if ‘you’ is intentional, since he technically sends the texts to the phone, and the ...

The promised critique! The numbers next to the highlighted parts correspond with the numbered comments below. NOTE: I took out 'Amen,' because I had no comments on it and it ...

I'm back! By the way, only put one space in between paragraphs. This makes it seem much longer, and people will be afraid to critique it. I'm not going to ...

The promised critique... Numbers next to the highlighted parts correspond with the 'highlighted comments' below. Oh, and ignore the random red/green swiggly lines under some words. Word doesn't like y

You asked me to critique everything in your portfolio, so here goes! ;P The numbers next to the highlighted areas correspond with the 'highlighted comments' below. Prologue Highlighted Comments 1. ...

I'd use 'past.' Isn't 'passed' or 'I passed the test,' 'she passed on,' 'he passed me the butter?' And 'past' is for time related subjects? Or it could be British/American ...

I'm back, again! :wink: You asked me for more critiques a while ago, and I'm finally on April vacation week, so I should be able to do a lot. :) ...

I know you've read the 'where does my piece go,' but you didn't say if you had found an answer, so I'll try to help. If you based your ideas ...

How do you get in? :shock: ~JFW1415

The promised review! ;P

I’m baaaack! As promised, a second critique on the revised version follows. I see that this is still really short, so I’m a bit afraid to edit, but I’ll give ...

This is creepy. :? ~JFW1415

*Nods* And it's a great way to be obsessive about organizing! I have my own folder saved in word, a folder for writing within it, a folder for every story ...

I personally hate putting flashbacks in italics, unless it's REALLY short. Flashbacks need to be clear that you're switching time, and they have to be needed. I just wrote a ...