JFW1415

I really don’t feel like editing this, since the only thing I can really comment is the punctuation. Underline book titles, italicize thoughts, don’t write a name instead of ‘[name] ...

Done! ~JFW1415

For me, coming up with names is pure torture . I end up writing the whole story calling them 'A,' 'B,' 'C,' and so on. I spend hours searching sites, ...

I usually pick names that I like...but doing that a lot makes me have tons of Jeremys. I've tried going to and doing that random name generator. But as I'm ...

If you have made any alterations, I'm sorry. I started a few hours ago, after your first edit and before your second. Hopefully some of this still helps? ~JFW1415

Hello again! Same format as always. Highlighted Comments 1. Suggestion: ‘…he examined it until the shapes became clear.’ ‘Suddenly’ is an evil word. ;P 2. Breath doesn’t (or shouldn’t) c

Hello again! Same format as always. Highlighted Comments 1. Suggestion: ‘It’s not working out.’ I don’t like the ellipses… 2. This seems to contradict all the ellipses. Just talking softly, ...

*I'm really sorry* Granted, but he dies the next day. (No, I don't want to live with him! :lol: I'm not wishing him death, but if he happened to die ...

Is that the American spelling of "sceptical" I presume? Yeah. I didn't even know there was a different way to spell it. :roll: ~JFW1415

I'll keep it short and sweet: I've never seen a site that had actual critiques before. Everywhere else I've been, people tell me to 'write more soon!' The members are ...

*Poke* Star Reviews They're already doing this... *Shrug* ~JFW1415

Don't worry - there's no chance you'll get addicted. It's guaranteed! :lol: So, welcome to YWS! I'm the one who gives insanely detailed and long reviews. Would you like one? ...

I have a daily horoscope sent to my e-mail address every day, which I read at the end of the day. (I like laughing about how wrong or right they ...

Lol yes my uncle worked at the movie theaters and begged for that poster so that I could have it. *sigh* I must have the Harry Potter things. Must. It's ...

I love the first one, but maybe try to make the eyes pop a bit more? Darker or lighter - something to make them completely stick out? (My friend actually ...