JFW1415

Actually, I just wrote a story with three main characters. Two never swore. One did 11 times. :lol: I agree; it's all about the character and where you put it ...

- You used 'yea' a few times. I realize every character has their own voice, but this seems too modern. In medieval times, yea was an informal way of saying ...

This was a very nice story. The only thing I didn't like was its length. Is there any way you could expound and tell us more? Is there any specific ...

I don't exactly just mostly similar. And how would you know if someone were to do that? Unless you knew all the same people they knew I'd think it'd be ...

It was locked when she put my review up. I think it's just so new writers don't post pathetic reviews that don't deserve the title. She probably unlocks it to ...

*Points above* Jabbs is brilliant; listen to her. Oh, and I'm not doing a nit-picky review, because it's already done. :wink: I suggest ditching everything up to 'I waited for ...

I'm sorry to say that I can't stand this piece. But! It's not your writing. You just use such an advanced, old-age vocabulary that I hate it. *Shrug* I have ...

*Poke* Part One Part Two ~JFW1415

Part One Part Two 'Cause your amazing and you love me. :wink: And would you like a critique? ~JFW1415

'Cause you love me so much, Jabbs. :wink: Part One Part Two Thanks! And bug me whenever if you'd like one! ~JFW1415

Part One Part Two I'm obsessed with your crits. :shock: And I'm still waiting for you to tell me what you'd like critiqued! :wink: ~JFW1415

Here's what I was talking about (I posted it earlier than I planned.) Part One Part Two And I'm reading yours now! :wink: ~JFW1415

If this is not rated correctly, please let me know. I couldn't decide if it should be 'R.' I don't use the f bomb, but I do use sh*t a ...

If this is not rated correctly, please let me know. I couldn't decide if it should be 'R.' I don't use the f bomb, but I do use sh*t a ...

I second Peri. :roll: The dialogue was rather good, but I'm confused. If you gave her a setting, and everyone faces, I think this could be a lot better. Also, ...