JFW1415

You told me to review, so I read through this thing. Now I feel bad; I don't know many people. :oops: I was very lost. :lol: What I did understand ...

The promised review. :wink: Highlighted Comments 1. Didn’t you just say it was always there? 2. Yes, it will. For a while. 3. I don’t know why, but I found ...

The promised review. :wink: Highlighted Comments 1. Suggestion: ‘her hands pressed against…’ You use ‘she’ a lot in this area. 2. I don’t like the repetition of ‘this.’ 3. What’s ...

You write too mcuh. :wink: Again, I'm lazy, so the comment is in the attachment. 50 comments! And overall stuff. :roll: Few points this way, but oh, well. Oh, and ...

You told me this was okay, but if it's not let me know. I get less points, but it takes less time. ~JFW1415 EDIT: Jeez. 15 points for something that ...

My friend who is a decent writer uses swear words, but only for three characters in her ongoing story. I role-play with a different real-life friend and one of my ...

Brian. A mean teacher. (Last name, please.) ~JFW1415

Heads up: I have not read any of the other comments. Also, I'm lazy, and you said you didn't mind file attachments, so here you go. (I'm also more in-depth ...

I'm a bit late, aren't I? :lol: I also agree that you need to focus. I would say only the trees, or the trees and the sign. The other things ...

Heehee…This is from another one of the ‘is your story clichéd?’ quiz. I knew I had seen something like this, went searching, and figured I’d show you it, just to ...

I really liked it! Just watch the lower lip – I thought the tongue was a lip at first. ;P Also, the shelf next to him, and the shading below ...

Heads up: I'm no artist. :wink: 1. No comment...I think it's cool. *Shrug* 2. It took me a while to figure out what pose it was in. Watch the position ...

Jeez! Am I the only one on this site with an inability to come up with names? I only added about 5 to the list, and I assumed that's what ...

First, this is rather...short. It's hard to critique, especially since it's non-fiction. However, I shall try! :lol: (I did promise I would, so...) Despite these similarities, it is the differences ...

A lot of places will state if you need to take it down. If they don't, take it down anyway or ask them. With novels, I highly doubt they would ...