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I wonder if I should lock this.... *giggles* No way! It's so useful! :roll: By the way, I just lost the game , and won this one. :wink: ~JFW1415

I'm back, yet again. :wink: Same format as always. Highlighted Comments 1. Combine this with the next paragraph. 2. I don’t really like how you wrote this… 3. And? Was ...

Thanks for the reviews, everyone! And gryph: you critiqued the old version! :wink: It wasn't too different, but a lot of things you didn't like I had already changed. I'll ...

I clicked on this poll thinking it'd be straight-forward. I skip over the choices and read all the posts and get a little confused. What's so hard about a simple ...

But we all still love you and want to help you get better. :lol: Just use this as an outline. It's great for that - loaded with ideas! You have ...

Sick of me yet? :wink: Paragraph Edits “This place is messy!” I said looking around at all the ropes and sludge and barrels of miscellaneous items on the deck. Andrew ...

Sorry, guys. :oops: Just let me know how to [s]kill off[/s] get rid of Holly, and I'll do it. Or someone could take her over? ~JFW1415

Yet another one. :roll: Paragraph Edits “Ahhh, roast duck,” Henry said. I watched the men around the table as their eyes turned ravenous at the sight of the bird on ...

Again! Paragraph Edits I inclined my head to him from across the table, mostly to avert my eyes. “Elizab- er, Izabe- Isabelle, uh. I’m Iza,” I stuttered. What’s with this? ...

Yet another critique by me... Paragraph Edits The chimpanzee holding Angie’s hand let go and ran across the deck on all fours while screeching loudly. Hahaha! I knew it. ;P ...

I hate the books. They're addicting, so I read them, but I tried rereading it once - awful. Same thing happened to me with Harry Potter. Amazing characters, awesome plot, ...

Paragraph Edits “Well, I’ll watch the helm,” Kross said to Henry. “I was a Captain’s mate when I was a younger lad. I probably have the most ship smarts around ...

I'm back! Sorry if I miss anything; I was editing for content rather than punctuation/spelling. Paragraph Edits “Henry!” Angie said sharply. “You’d better be glad the girl was awake before ...

6/10 Good message, hurts my eyes. ~JFW1415

9/10 It made me laugh. :lol: ~JFW1415