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Nit-Picks By the way, I'm not pointing out the good stuff. If I did, we'd be here all day. “Stop that.” Who is speaking? “Let me go,” she whispers, but ...

*Glee* I knew it was just the action you needed work on. This was, once more, amazing. I was surprised when I found myself on the last page, and it’s ...

Before I Read For some reason, ‘The Straight Edge of A Razor’ flows better in my mind. That’s what I immediately read when I saw this, and what drew me ...

Chapter One (This is only for chapter one. I'll do more later.) Before I Read - Please space this out! You didn’t double-space everything, and I just spent ages fixing ...

Before I Read Aw, it’s not in my format! :( Oh well, this version’s easier to alter than the other type you usually use. And I’m soooooo sorry about the ...

I'm finally done! First off, I'm really sorry about the wait. Life's been crazy lately. Chapter Six will be critiqued next, though - don't worry! Only one main problem with ...

I am sooooo sorry I took so long to critique this. You asked for it ages ago, but I couldn’t get to it ‘til now. Life’s been a bit insane ...

Sam and Snoink, you two rock. :) The father is supposed to be having an affair with Caleb's (the neighbor) mother. I didn't want to go out there and say ...

I know a ton of people who won't use MySpace because they got tired of all the "Why am I not in your top friends?" messages. Thank you! I ended ...

This is rather perplexing... Time: 2.30 EST Error: I opened YWS (not signed in) and Chimped Out was the layout. I signed in, still Chimped Out. I went to settings ...

I agree with King, though most of the words here should still be used in moderation. I just can't stand 'suddenly,' though. (Oh, and eyes can sparkle when you cry. ...

They had amazing characters I fell in love with (literally in the case of Fang. Smile) The dog in Harry Potter? Or the guy in Maximum Ride? :lol: I used ...

Because you're amazing? Rainbows and Roses Just a short, quick thing that I need a lot of help in. I need to set some time aside to edit! I really ...

I personally hate all the current big books: Maximum Ride, Twilight, and Harry Potter. I found the style terrible. But I've still read all of them (except Twilight.) Why? They ...

It kind of sounds like autumn. I'd make it more clear at the end, just to wrap things up. Since you can't add or take away words, I won't give ...