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I, however, stood my ground. The word however here creates a stop, and I had to read the sentence twice to make sure I got it right. I think you ...

Why are you ignoring me?" He asked softly. I took a deep breath, trying to calm myself down. "Tyler, how can you not know?" I said gently. This should be ...

despite she had just finished puking her stomach up a few seconds Despite doesn't entirely work in that context, you might want to say 'despite the fact that' or 'even ...

:!: Philosophy of the Dark- Authors note: Sorry about the time it's taken to post this chapter, it's been a hectic week. Enjoy! :!: Chapter 21 -Apologies -On both accounts ...

hehe, no...that was a mistake...hehe, I'll fix that. Thanks Miya.

Just mum downstairs that meant. Please change the wording here, I had to read it a few times over to make some sense of it. ‘Easy Beanz’ You changed the ...

Doctor’s appointment today I don't think doctor should be capatalized, but I could be wrong... Yet another beautifully written section, I really really like it. Your characters are extrememly beleiv

This was what I had been dreading. This was what had kept me awake night after night. And this was the conversation I had been avoiding. It seems like these ...

No one did care though Either this sentence didn't make sense to me, or it just didn't fit in. Either way I think you should do something about it. :arrow: ...

i still dont know how to PM u Well, below every post theres a little line of buttons, they say Profile, PM me!, and such. Click PM me, and there ...

haha, I love barbershop...I know, weird. Anywho, Fred is uber weird. And confusing...*shakes head*

A loud banging noise echoed through my head. It woke me up with a start. These seem like they would be better as one sentence instead of two, but it ...

Well, there shall be no boxes for you today(from me anyways)! So, shall we begin? First of all, near the end you said, his eyes, his eyes. Didn't make any ...

Well, what's the time period like? What's she like, all those kinds of things can help you find the perfect name. Or you can go to the 2000 names thing ...

oooo...big font!!! Anyways, yeah, there are some people over twenty (there's one person who I think is about twenty that's new, uh...throwthezac...I think.) bet yeah. Anyways, don't be shy, this ...